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Eyes that watch me,
eyes that don't.
Eyes that follow me,
eyes that won't.
Eyes in my family and
eyes in my friends.
Eyes in nature that
never seem to end.
Eyes that watch every move I make,
every breath I take,
every word I utter and mutter and stutter.
Eyes that judge me, love me and hate me;
Eyes that fear me, loathe me, pity me;
Eyes that want to be me and curse me for existing.
But the eyes that watch me the most,
always the most critical,
are the eyes that
belong
to
me.
I wrote this on JUne 10th 2012 but I never thought much of it until a few days ago. Not the best, but I love the concept.
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C-Allagash Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012
I really can relate to this poem.

I wanted to write something more or less like this before, but the way you did it... :wow:
You've just said all I had in mind, and brilliantly!
I saw your poem by chance, and I am happy I did.
A very profitable reading, a poem with a very good point, surprising conclusion and written with maestry!
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Pietroschek Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Except for teh 'Eye-Tyrant' from Dungeons & Dragons you mentioned a lot of eyes for sure! Nice truth in it!
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counting-vertebrae Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
This is great. Not the most complicated but this style and the concept really work for you. :D
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