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I scream, but nobody hears
I cry, but nobody cares
I look, but I do not find
I try, but I do not die
I wake, but I never really sleep
I eat, but I never really taste
I long, but I never really know
I try to stay, but it is time to go
I slumber, but I do not wake
I crack, but I do not break
I gasp, but I do not breath
I swallow, but I do not sneeze
I am floating, through the pale air
I am moving, though I do not care
I am strangled with tears, yet I do not pout
I am dead, inside and out.
I wrote thjs out of boredom in religion class and my religion teacher saw it and became slightly worried about me. So I decided I'd post it online. Irony!!!! I wanted to create the idea of a person, trapped in a world of misery they do no know how to escape, an endless cycle of emptiness. I repeat two lines about sleeping and waking to contradict one another to show that in both worlds the dreamer is dreamless. Hope you like it!
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Rozaliaferndew Featured By Owner May 2, 2014
That bassically sums up my entire life which is extremely sad since im only three years older than a decade
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EmeraldGuardian-04 Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

:wow: I think my life is complete your poem just summarized my whole life. xD


I like this poem very much. :la: This reminds me of my goal in life: to be dreamless *Shot because goals can be dreams, but anyway* Have a brofist for your awesomeness. :iconpewdiebrofistplz:

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Breatheforlife Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2014  Student Writer
Awe thanks lol.
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shawnthewolf12 Featured By Owner May 27, 2013
XD nice!
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GeorgieSummers Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this is beautiful!
I love the way the lines contradict each other and the image you've created and the feelings you've illustrated. This is so wonderfully done xD
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Silencedbook9 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student Writer
Need a hug?
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Ms-Lachrymosa Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student General Artist
I draw or write things of these type in the back of my notebook, and my friends just looked at me weirdly haha.

I love this :) great job in making it!
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fluffyg444 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
is it okay
to use this as my quote of the day?
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Breatheforlife Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Writer
But of course. :jasinski: Thank you!
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Student General Artist
Whoa pretty cool poem, and it really does sound like somebody trapped in a "world of misery"
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